He does this everywhere, a joke sometimes called the “Burly Detective Syndrome”. Since he hasn’t set up the fact that Craig is an expert in essence, he has to tell us through narration/exposition that this is his role in the scene. Dungeon Born (The Divine Dungeon Book 1) (Kindle Locations 2367-2371). This got Frank’s attention, as Craig was a well-known expert of all things Essence. There is a big ‘ol slab of rock in the entryway, and it has some kinda energy moving in it I can’t decipher.” Craig dropped into an unfamiliar cant of dialogue as he talked to Frank. “What? What’s the matter? Why aren’t you in the dungeon?” Frank growled at a clerk as she dropped a stack of paperwork on his desk. Part of this is a lack of skill, and partly because he doesn’t use action to show characterization, he uses dialogue to show characterization. This is compounded by the fact that Dakota can’t write dialogue. We get to see the mechanics in action for maybe three or four pages before we are inundated by another twenty pages of narration/exposition. Unfortunately, Dakota has no idea how to actually explain the mechanics without resulting to the worst way for any author to world build, by using narration and exposition. There’s been a lot of thought put into it and the process of leveling it up and the mechanics involved. The book focuses on how dungeons are “made” by rpg rules and how they evolve.
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